Yugioh Story (China Steel Wall)

Yugioh Story (China Steel Wall)

Creator : Yuri Bakura From TDA, DGA, TWA, DAD
Story : Yuri Bakura From TDA, DGA, TWA, DAD
Grammar Editor : Vongola-X From DGA, TDA
Character : Marauding Captain, Gagagigo, Blazing Inpachi,

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Rate if you like xD

point out my grammar mistake if you able to find one, i will edit it.

Marauding Captain was the strongest human. He served under Qin Shi Huang, the current king of china.



One day, when Marauding captain went on vacation, the enemies attacked the castle of Qin Shi Huang.



The enemies managed to win the war.



After the enemies won the war, they increased the taxes three times by forcing the king to sign the contract.



The properties of those who were unable to pay the taxes, were taken away, BY FORCE of course.



They even raped young and innocent girls when those girls didn't have money to pay the taxes.



Those evil deeds didn't stop until Marauding Captain came back. Marauding and his loyal friend, Gagagigo swore to avenge the King's death.



The enemy knew this would gonna happen so they already prepared a trap. The enemies unleash the Fire Robot and fight with Marauding Captain and Gagagigo.



When Marauding and Gagagigo almost had won the fight, the enemy shot a laser at Gagagigo.



Marauding saved Gagagigo from the laser by blocking the laser with his own body.



Before Marauding died, he told Gagagigo to win the war...



Suddenly, God, seeing it all from heaven, felt so touched that he decided to revive Maraunding.



Marauding destroyed the robot with just 2 slashes.



Marauding attacked the great China wall with all of his troops.



And he won the war.


After the war, they build a stronger wall, the China Steel Wall to prevent any enemy's attacks.

You Said:
Those who unable to pay the tax, their properties will be took, BY FORCE of course

took should be taken

Other than that, I must say this is a completely original story. How were you able to find all the cards to make the story this way?

Yes, very interesting, i never saw a story that is told with cards nice work.

Marauding Captain was the strongest human ever live in China. i think it should be "strongest human ever alive"

thx for pointing out those mistake xD
and i find those card at yugioh wikia and some of them, i think myself.

ahm, no offense Yuri, but I will edit the post in order to fix some mistakes

thx, i will add u in the credit tomorrow, now i wanna sleep xD

The whole fanfiction was posted and commented on 10th August (That's when my birthday is), so I couldn't resist to comment.
Even though the fanfiction is almost a year old,I'll comment only once,so it doesn't look like spamming at old topics.

The story was really original.
If you do more stories like this,it will be great,but do it a little longer.